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Old 05-05-2013, 04:20 AM
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I think you are right not to be satisfied

I think it might have been better with 4 lines
possibly lines 2 an 4 rhyming and the other two lines without rhyme

You could have tried free verse ( without rhyme ) but not all poets are comfortable writing this way.

However with the title of the poem "expectations" I think it would be well suited to the style of Enjambment...why don't you give it a go ?
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