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Old 05-05-2013, 06:47 AM
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I love it. I agree that the AABCCB scheme is tough. The only suggestion I have is to make the first stanza consistent with the others by closing the sentence at the end of the third line and adjusting the fourth to start a new one. Overall, it is fantastic -- you have a talent that I do not possess and that I, therefore, admire.

Thank you for the share.
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